Wednesday, June 21, 2017

#Barathon 3/7 Deadly Sins: Lust


She saw him as her life
He already had a wife
She wanted to wake up beside him every morning
He wanted to sleep with her every night
She lost, he won
Somewhere between heaven and hell, love cried and lust mocked


This post is written for BAR-A-THON 2017 and my Theme for this year is Seven Deadly Sins

 Click here to read the previous Bar-a-Thon posts
June 17th: GluttonyJune 19th: PrideJune 21st: SevenJune 23rd: Seven
June 26th: SevenJune 28th: SevenJune 30th: Seven
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15 comments:

  1. Penelope Potty SnooperJune 21, 2017 at 8:58 AM

    I am no fan of adulterers and marriage breakers so I am happy that lust was only mocking her.....

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    1. DeepaJune 21, 2017 at 1:11 PM

      I wonder what the wife of this man would feel when she comes to know about this illicit affair.
      Thanks for dropping by BellyBytes

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  2. Balaka BasuJune 21, 2017 at 12:27 PM

    I loved the lines "she wanted to wake up..and he wanted to sleep" very nicely those two lines expressed how their goals were different. Beautiful poem and great use of the prompt.

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    1. DeepaJune 21, 2017 at 1:12 PM

      Thank you Balaka Basu, I really hope people don't go through such a thing but there are so many gullible ones out there
      Thanks for dropping by :-)

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  3. RanjiniJune 21, 2017 at 1:04 PM

    This is brilliant! So few words that say so much. Amazing take on seven deadly sins. I somehow feel sad reading this. Don't you?

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    1. DeepaJune 21, 2017 at 1:13 PM

      I feel sad for her and I wish to kill that man..
      But, that is someone's life isn't it?
      Thanks for dropping by Ranjini :-)

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  4. Dr Roshan RadhakrishnanJune 21, 2017 at 1:38 PM

    awww... sadly, still a very common scenario, isn't it? I have friends who have been on both sides of this equation and love always loses. It is invariably a fling for the married person.

    14 Dishes of Malabar Cuisine

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    1. DeepaJune 21, 2017 at 1:46 PM

      It might be hard to be friends and listen to their stories right?
      Thanks for dropping by Roshan :-)

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  5. UnknownJune 21, 2017 at 4:01 PM

    awesome- the flow, the lines, everything!

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  6. kalpana solsiJune 22, 2017 at 11:47 AM

    a serious situation put across so succinctly in verse. she hankered for love while he lusted only for her body. Didn't she know the fact that he was already married?

    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/06/of-ice-and-men.html

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  7. NehaJune 22, 2017 at 3:22 PM

    Amazing take on the deadly sin 'Lust' . It is so potent, that people forget the pain it will bring later.
    http://www.nehatambe.com/you-acquire-new-skills-like-being-a-detective-and-selective-listening/

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  8. ObsessivemomJune 22, 2017 at 5:11 PM

    You did that beautifully - the two sides of the story. Sad though, that love lost.

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  9. shalz75June 22, 2017 at 8:11 PM

    This is always such a no win situation but I dont understand how intelligent women fall for it everytime!! Well composed poem for sure

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  10. NamrathaJune 23, 2017 at 10:51 AM

    Exact portrayal of an affair. Very difficult for all involved, but they can't let go either. Your best so far in this series:)

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  11. ParulJune 24, 2017 at 2:07 PM

    That was fantastic. well done. Wonder how she fell for such a sin.

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